First off, I really liked the way you made the connection between Kindness and Manaakitanga. You haven't just said that they are the same thing, you have given clear statements that outline each value. Which communicates that you can not have one without the other. Awesome observation!
Your writing is detailed, mostly grammatically correct (aside from a few small errors) and you have used a wide range of topical vocab.
I would like to see you using paragraphs to organise your ideas. Even the summaries you have written about these role models can be organised into paragraphs. Great work Roseena!
I really like your manaakitanga project it was really cool to look at. you showed me alot of people who have showed manaakitanga in their life. It also like the very detailed description you gave us on every person. I have learnt alot from this so I thank you for that. I like your color choices.
First off I really like what you did on your work and I really like what you write on you Maanakitanga project and I like who you picked for your maankitanga work and I really like what you did on you people that you picked to write about them.
Kia Ora Roseena,
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I really liked the way you made the connection between Kindness and Manaakitanga. You haven't just said that they are the same thing, you have given clear statements that outline each value. Which communicates that you can not have one without the other. Awesome observation!
Your writing is detailed, mostly grammatically correct (aside from a few small errors) and you have used a wide range of topical vocab.
I would like to see you using paragraphs to organise your ideas. Even the summaries you have written about these role models can be organised into paragraphs. Great work Roseena!
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ReplyDeleteI really like your manaakitanga project it was really cool to look at. you showed me alot of people who have showed manaakitanga in their life. It also like the very detailed description you gave us on every person. I have learnt alot from this so I thank you for that. I like your color choices.
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Kra ora Roseena
ReplyDeleteFirst off I really like what you did on your work and I really like what you write on you Maanakitanga project and I like who you picked for your maankitanga work and I really like what you did on you people that you picked to write about them.